College students should base their choice of field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
The ultimate aim of study is stable, secured life. College students should thus choose their field of study based on the scope of the field says speaker. However, I don’t agree with the speaker’s assertion. Although the field offering greater diversity of opportunities may be tempting regarding immediate benefit, it can never ensure long term success or benefit. Thus I think instead of following the opportunities, students should follow their interest for the success.
To begin with, let us take an example of Albert Einstein. At his time, quantum physics never existed. Had he agreed to the speaker’s claim he would never have pursued his interest and would have run after some financial job or any other field which promised better opportunities. Instead, he adhered to his interest and kept on cajoling his dreams and ultimately became successful in revolutionalizing the world. We cannot even imagine Einstein doing some work sitting infront of computer just because that job promised better life. This shows, it’s not opportunities define us. Infact, we create opportunities ourselves.
Additionally, there are several pathbreakers like travel blogger, youtuber, vlogger who have created opportunities for themselves. Before them pursuing the field, nobody thought they would ever survive in the field as the field had no security, no opportunities, yet they followed their interest and now they are renowned in the society because of their peculiar activities. Sisan Baniya, a travel blogger, is famous in our country. He never bothered to do what other urged him to do and following his has made him successful.
On the flip side, the opponent may argue, walking on the entirely new path where none has walked is difficult and has no security but pursuing the field just because of its abundant suppy of opportunities is also not that secured. To illustrate, lets take an example of banking sector, which is immensely rich in opportunities at present was not like that previously. Civil service was more charming some years back. And the field which is alluring today may not remain same some years later. And thus security is just a façade not reality.
To sum up, the popularity of field, job opportunities keep on changing. If we base our future on such capricious aspect, it may lead us to devastating situation later on. What remains with us always is our interest. If we have interest, we may even create our own job. As they say, ‘Where there is will, there is a way'.’ Hence should base their choice of field of study on their interest rather than on the opportunities or charm the field offers at present.
- Government should provide free college and university education to all the students. 62
- Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. 50
- True success lies in rejecting the familiar things. 66
- College students should base their choice of field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. 58
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...er ensure long term success or benefit. Thus I think instead of following the opport...
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Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
...ituation later on. What remains with us always is our interest. If we have interest, we m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, i think, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12183908046 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86667311893 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56091954023 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.7861056119 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6923076923 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7307692308 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306654848596 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731506437519 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127202594289 0.0758088955206 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176136523118 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115088962283 0.0667264976115 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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