The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?
Talking about education plays an important rules in communities as well as for the children’s life in the future. Some people consider that the cultural arts and music is not necessary in school so that cutting down these subjects is one of the solution to students focus on other subjects. In my opinion, I believed that the two subjects should not cut down in school.
Why schools should not remove two subjects like arts and music out of schools because the cultural arts and music have many benefits for both of mental and physical of children. Therefore, to reduce stressful from pressure of many subjects like: Math, physical, literature that the education system should encourage rising to learn art and music as a way to entertainment. Thanks to, learning will improve and bring enjoyment on others subjects of children. Moreover, the development of arts and music may create great career opportunities for them, in other words, learning arts and music can orient for their career like artists or singers. In a recent survey of employment opportunities in top ten cities of America, the career in term of artists and musicians accounted of 10% of other careers and contribute on developing the economic.
In conclusion, I believed that it is a great combination both of the cultural arts and music will more effective for developing of children in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as for, in conclusion, talking about, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1148.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 229.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01310043668 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80436395632 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541484716157 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.8051240027 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.555555556 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7777777778 7.06120827912 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302063849892 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130644663352 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671367961028 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204639117977 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492087596981 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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