Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantages of such development outweigh the disadvantages?

Technology is probably one of the greatest inventions of the century. People can easily access anything from anywhere just on one click. Some people believe that the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages. This essay provides some empirical shreds of evidence to support this statement.
To Commence with one of the paramount advantages is the accessibility. People access the newly released movie or games on the internet from their mobile device without going anywhere. It reduces the time and also the human effort. Whenever they get free time from their hectic routine, they can watch a movie or play any game depending on their interest. For example, while traveling by train or bus and while waiting for somebody, it is to spare their time without getting bored. It also helps in many other things like shopping, learning, traveling and many others.
On the other hand, the major disadvantage is increasing health issues such as obesity and weaker eyesight. People are addicted to it and spending their whole day on their gadgets and ignoring all other important tasks especially teenagers. Children have to focus on their study but because of these devices they do not concentrate, and their score in exam getting diminish. In the past few decades, people mostly playing outdoor games but nowadays, all are engaged with their smartphones, as a result, they are getting fat because they did not do any physical activity.
To conclude, I would reiterate my opinion that everything has some pros and cons, it also has but their numerous advantages are heavier than their disadvantages. And people can overcome the disadvantages if they use it in an appropriate manner.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate manner" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ercome the disadvantages if they use it in an appropriate manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14130434783 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71806513385 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590579710145 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8169418879 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6875 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183435711663 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591486560662 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463080428935 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10239146538 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349362735263 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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