In this report, we can get that the residents of Forsythe have more healthful lifestyles by the survey that the people are eating more healthy under the authorites' guidance than ten years ago.Also the author found that the people in the city purchased more food products contain kiran and ate few sulia. There are some loopholes in this report we should evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, the response to the survey could not represent the whole situation of the residents. As we do not know how many residents invovled in this survey thus the conclusion that they are eating more healthy in the way of conforming more closely to the government nutritional recommendations than ten years ago. Mabye threre are few residents respose to the survey even there may be some people who complain the authorites' guidance. Moreover, there is also no evidence to show us that under the government guidance of diet, people must be healthy. So the survey is not compelling to prove the people's healtyful diet. Thirdly, the author does not tell us the health conditons of residents in this city ten years ago, thus we can not compare whether they are more or less healthy than before. Likewise, there is a fluctuation of population in this city with high possibility like people with healthful lifestyles or not in other place moved into this area, thus complexed the local healthy condition.
In addtion, there is no evidence of the increasing purchasing food products containing kiran could prove that the residents are leading a healthy lifestyles.Firstly, we do not know whether the kiran works. The author says kiran can reduce cholesterol. While we do not know how much cholesterol in the food of local people, we could not asserted this kiran must be healthy to the local people, maybe there are some other healthy food does good to the people's body. Or on the other hand, the local people just like eating food with kiran because it is delicious. Likewise, the decreasing of purchasing sulia is not compelling to prove that the local people are adopting healthy lifestyles, maybe they just do not like the favor than before. Besides, the author notes that few of most healthy residents eat sulia, while it also does not mean eating sulia is unhealthy to body because there is no evidence to prove they do harm to the people's body.
In conclusion, the statement is not well supported by the evidence. To support the idea that the local people adopted more healthy lifestyles, first of all, a compelling comparison is essential to the report, which comparing the same group of local people's lifestyle which changed better.Secondly, the author should make an exhaustive survey of the residents' food to find some clue of healty lifesytle instead of some of the them.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 472 350
No. of Characters: 2254 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.661 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.467 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.615 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.882 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.183 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
... authorites guidance than ten years ago.Also the author found that the people in the...
^^^^
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... authorites guidance than ten years ago.Also the author found that the people in the...
^^^^
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t the whole situation of the residents. As we do not know how many residents invov...
^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lifestyle'?
Suggestion: lifestyle
...hat the residents are leading a healthy lifestyles.Firstly, we do not know whether the kir...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...idents are leading a healthy lifestyles.Firstly, we do not know whether the kiran works...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
... the food of local people, we could not asserted this kiran must be healthy to the local...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 804, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s that few of most healthy residents eat sulia, while it also does not mean eatin...
^^
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...which comparing the same group of local peoples lifestyle which changed better.Secondly...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondly
... peoples lifestyle which changed better.Secondly, the author should make an exhaustive s...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
...should make an exhaustive survey of the residents food to find some clue of healty lifesy...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 414, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ome clue of healty lifesytle instead of some of the them.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 422, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'them'?
Suggestion: the; them
... of healty lifesytle instead of some of the them.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, in conclusion, first of all, more or less, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91684434968 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64978200857 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409381663113 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.1490856205 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.647058824 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5882352941 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2941176471 5.70786347227 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177777934579 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628229528497 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738935015895 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121728222712 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064570271141 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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