In the above argument,the owner of the Central Plaza is claiming about the decrease in their business as a result of the increasing popularity of the skateboarding over the past two years. He cites some of the evidence accusing skateboarding which i don`t see as a relevant evidence. The owner forecast that prohibiting skateboarding, their business will return to its original high levels.
Firstly, the thing is about business. One can`t expect their business to rise up in a perennial way for the long period of time. There will always be rise and fall in business. And in this argument, the owner of the Central Plaza is accusing stakeboarders for decreasing in their business. If that was the case then he/she should cite some relevant evidence to bolster their statement. And the provided evidence doesn`t seem to undergrid the argument. There is no such statistical data proof to strengthen his argument. There might be possibilities that he might be jealous of the progressive ongoing business of the skateboarders. Instead of working on how to improve their business in a descent way, they are incriminating the skateboarders. There can be other various effective alternative ways to improve their business instead of defaming the stakeboarders.
Secondly, about the dramatic increase in the litter and vandalism throughout the plaza, the owner of plaza is blaming for the skateboarders. And he is recommending to prohibit skateboarders in the city. There is no proof that the vandalism is done by the people of skate boarders. this might have been act of some reckless person who has nothing to do and wanders around just for nothing. This might have been done by the people who have some receive with the owner for owing some revenge. The owner should have considered about these things and only they should have move on to that step. This seems like the owner is getting jealous on the increasing business of the skateboarders than theirs. And about the litter, this might have been done by some streets dogs or may be wind. They can`t just assume the whole thing without finding out the actual reason on the decrease on their business.That would be so ingenuous of the owner.
In sum, the owner come with strong evidence to bolster his statement. In this world of clarity, on one is going to admit his conclusion based on those callow evidence and irrevalent reason that has accused over the skateboarders.If their accusition is also true, some argument bolstering should be conveyed.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2036 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.836 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.304 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.094 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.304 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.42 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
In the above argument,the owner of the Central Plaza is claiming ...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...rding over the past two years. He cites some of the evidence accusing skateboarding which i...
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Line 2, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... One can't expect their business to rise up in a perennial way for the long ...
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Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a perennial way" with adverb for "perennial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...pos;t expect their business to rise up in a perennial way for the long period of time. There will...
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Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...rise up in a perennial way for the long period of time. There will always be rise and fall in ...
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Line 2, column 296, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rders for decreasing in their business. If that was the case then he/she should ci...
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Line 4, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...za is blaming for the skateboarders. And he is recommending to prohibit skateboar...
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Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...s done by the people of skate boarders. this might have been act of some reckless pe...
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Line 4, column 570, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'moved'.
Suggestion: moved
... these things and only they should have move on to that step. This seems like the ow...
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Line 4, column 769, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t have been done by some streets dogs or may be wind. They can't just assume...
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Line 4, column 900, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...eason on the decrease on their business.That would be so ingenuous of the owner. ...
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Line 6, column 230, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...that has accused over the skateboarders.If their accusition is also true, some arg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0551558753 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91880314661 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47242206235 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6564929277 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8333333333 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230209895048 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689277472533 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105415633702 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162393013279 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112112760832 0.0628817314937 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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