Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity.
Charity is very important in society. It helps poor people to live better. Some people believe that wealthy people should give more money to charity; others disagree. In my view, they must spend much more money on charity works for two important reasons.
First, they really can help poor people a lot. As you know, today many people suffer from poverty all over the world. If other people help them, they can live better. For example, when I was in Tehran studying electrical engineering, I read an article about some areas in my country where people have no running water to even drink. The article explained that those people always struggle with water and sometimes they are forced to drink pollutant water. As a result, they are involved with many diseases and that was a terrible situation. The author said that the government could not afford to bring healthy water for them. I remember that after publishing that article many affluent people gave a large amount of money for help. They solved the problem by creating a modern system that brought water to those areas. Those people would not have rescued from that horrible situation if it were not for wealthy people's help in my country. This experience taught me that the more money people have, the more they must give to charity.
Second, it brings good feels for them. When you help someone else, you get positive energy that makes you really happy. For instance, I am an ordinary employee in a small company in my hometown. My salary is not too much, but I dedicate 20 percent of that for helping a charity that provides food and shelter for the poor family. Although I have some difficulty with my costs during the month, I am always happy and in a good mode. Helping other people makes me more satisfied. If I had not helped poor people, I would not have enjoyed my life as well as I do now. As you can see, people must help charities more, when they have more money.
In sum, wealthy people should give more money to charity. Not only, can they help other people, but they can reach to a good mod mentally. We should all care more about poor people.
- TPO-20 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity. 66
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, well, for example, for instance, you know, as a result, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61213720317 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.16387153048 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503957783641 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6574911445 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.2307692308 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5769230769 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354246092005 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116199175772 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123809837656 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261079552145 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320355235458 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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