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Mali was born in 13 of April 1986. She spent carefree days as a child and most of her sweet memories are related to being at her grandmother's house with two big gardens in the summer holidays. She was born in a family of 7 including 4 elder brothers and parents.
Mali studied mathematics in high school and got a bachelor degree in accounting. She pursued her dream of becoming a finance expert by participating in the entrance exam of the most top university of Iran, called the University of Tehran. Despite many doubted that she could not make it, she got the fifth rank in that exam which is held once a year and nail it. That was one of a turning point in her life that made her believe that nothing is impossible.
As someone who is really into the capital market and accounting, she first started her career as an accountant in an internationally well-known company. Afterward, she became a financial analyst in a bank-related broker firm. Then, she paved her way to a high professional investment bank as a financing/capital raising expert which she really enjoyed doing that.
Despite the ups and downs of her career life, she has never given up her dream of moving to Australia. Actually, it was about in February of 2011 when she first came to Australia as a visitor to visit both her brother and the beautiful land of Australia. She visited the paradise Australia in 2013 again, and those enjoyable days of being there made her come to think of immigrating to this country. She has taken the IELTS exam 11 times to get the Australian visa, which is a good example of her perseverance to do her goals. Absolutely, immigrating to beautiful Australia was a big event of her life.
Mali is really a big fan of pottery and energy healing, she also is really into traveling. In her viewpoint, the most exciting part of traveling is trying out ethnic cuisine. She also really enjoy doing sport, especially martial arts, which she has participated in for about 6 years.
These days, her short term goal is to beat the PTE exam to get her permanent visa sooner. As a long-term goal, she wants to be CPA (Certified Public Accountant), and learn and practice energy healing as well as pottery which are the fields of her interest.
- A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree？ 85
- Some people believe the large shopping malls are replacing local shops which is bad for local economies. What is your opinion? 88
- Some people work for long hours to achieve success and some give importance to free time. compare and discuss these issues. 88
- child workers and paid job 85
- over-packaged products 88
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, really, so, then, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62311557789 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71699485812 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547738693467 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 5.43587174349 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0833756736 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 7.06120827912 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198121047497 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731730751881 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843188800984 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106283767197 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574051942744 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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