we cannot help everyone in the world that needs help so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is universally excepted that we are living in global era where we are connected to each other. However helping everyone who needs help is impossible. Whether we should only worry our local communities and countries or not has sparked a heated debate. I am strongly of the opinion that everyone in the world deserve to being helped
First of all, it is important to help neighbors and fellow citizens. In most countries, there are thousands of people are impoverished and disadvantaged. According to a research of Hanoi University, there were 2 million Vietnamese people affected by Haiyan storm in 2015. Many lost all their families and their assets, even more some were injury or dead. The damage was uncountable. However, with the help of Chinese, it was easier for VietNam‘s recovery. As a result, after 2 months the storm passing, many people could come back to their work and 100 houses was built for people who lost their house
Secondly, there are opportunities to volunteer time and give money to help people who are in need. Volunteer works are not only for local areas but also abroad. It involves both complex jobs as teaching and healing and simple one as donating clothing or serving food. In addition, It provides for people, especially, youngster a chance to work and learn while helping other people. In 2015, the number of foreign volunteers came to VietNam took about over 25% the total number of volunteers in whole country.
Last but not least, giving a help with other communities means building a strong relationship between countries. For example, the helps of Japan in building high streets in VietNam brought many commercial contracts between 2 countries that made the economy of both developed stably. Besides the economic relationships, the affair of people in 2 countries also has been tightened closely.
In conclusion, I firmly believe we should not only worry our own problems but also concern about the difficulties of other communities and countries.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08484848485 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76876849367 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578787878788 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7639514878 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2222222222 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281996060302 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834173802455 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888708773816 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176429221366 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128859814403 0.056905535591 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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