some young adults prefer independence from their parents,while others prefer to live with their families,which case you prefer?
All of us dream to reach a level when we become dependent on ourselves, this depends just on our decision to build our lives as we want. The age when we became responsible without any trending from relative or parents differs from one person to another, this depends on your mental ability, and how much you learned from your experience, so this makes me in two minds about to live alone or to stay within the family members, I have many factors which they define the proper case.
To begin with, if you have a good personality also enough courage, you determine in this case that you can live dependent. I agree with that all of us should try to live alone, this will enhance your skills in life, makes you harder enough to face any problem in life. Also, every wrong decision you made will give you hint or motivation to become bolder, you will know who to get out from any dilemma easily like you were not hurt, this just paraphrases your principle as well as correct your internal conception. My experience is a compelling example of this, when I was in university, I decided to take a dorm with roommate also to work alone to get money for my studying, in the first it was a hard and tough mission on me, like how to tiding my time, how to cook, buy vegetables, and how the salary will be adequate for month? I tried much without any help, in the first semester I remember that I was weak and disrupted and I got low marks, that I was complaining that there is no time to study, but in the last term I got the highest mark between all the pupils in my major as well as I was getting the best employee every month in my company, just realize how this way drafted me and gave me enough leading skills in my life, like to be a good boss and a brilliant student. I learned a vital role from administrating my budget is the thankful feeling to my parents when I knew the volume of the hardship and responsibility on them.
On the other hand, I see that many adults will be destroyed if they will live alone because that their mentally and intellectually skills are trapped in just small liberty, which this happened from the bad raising, or from the over-dependent on the parent in everything,I think that there are adult people who can lead companies while others who cannot decide anything without getting consensus or hinting, this delay the brain completing process, so this kind of people need to stay enough time with their families to get enough realization and understanding, or they will fall in many mistakes because they miss the wise.
In conclusion, I feel that the understanding level you have determined if you able to live alone or to stay within your family, if you were strong enough you can feel in some independence, but if you did not have enough skills you need more time, this help you to avoid many problems in future if you want to be glad.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while, i feel, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42344045369 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47946674357 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485822306238 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 20.1344086022 258% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 152.629748083 48.9658058833 312% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 234.0 100.406767564 233% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.9 20.6045352989 257% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.4 5.45110844103 227% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152288881262 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691113856152 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512436936474 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10440749889 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022954764071 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.8 11.7677419355 219% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 35.62 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 10.1575268817 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.24 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.0537634409 227% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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