Community in which we grow up plays a key role in our lives. It is a known fact that it our mind and personality are partially shaped by our society. It is not only for personal development but also crucial for the development of itself. Thus, generally speaking, it can be said that people should make a contribution to their community in order to enhance their culture. Unfortunately, most people, especially young adults do not think of helping their community. I shall discuss the reasons lead me to think this way.
First of all, in this period of time, young adults are supposed to deal with the countless task. Responsibilities such as assignments given by their teacher, countless exams they have to pass, social relationships they have to maintain or creating a better future such as finding a decent job or getting married are required significant effort and time to undergo. whereas thinking of these arduous tasks puts high pressure on them and exhaust their energy, it is understandable that they do not mind to help their community but themselves.
Second, young people grow up in a consumption society. This should not be restricted by just delicious foods or stylish clothes. We can add plenty of ingredients to this culture such as killing time for personal pleasure or wasting time on unnecessary things. By way of example, nowadays people have plenty of activities that they can enjoy such as watching sports games, meeting their friends or, for example, interesting in extreme sports. Of course, these activities provide some benefits but mostly consume people's time, mind and energy. I can easily say that these comfortable and colorful worlds cause them to just enjoy life but avoid providing benefits to their society.
Last but not least, there are plenty of factors attracting people's attention. Technology has been improved dramatically and offers people a lot of charming time and mind killer opportunities. A person can interact with many people instantly, can surf on the social media platform or play computer games to have fun. They just prefer to concentrate on their pleasure rather than thinking of their family, society or humanity According to the scientists, these are negative impacts of the millennium era on the young people.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that young people do not mind their society. Countless concerns through their life, growing up in a consumerist society and having plenty of charming activities are some of the reasons lying under this fact.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...hink this way. First of all, in this period of time, young adults are supposed to deal with...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...significant effort and time to undergo. whereas thinking of these arduous tasks puts hi...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., meeting their friends or, for example, interesting in extreme sports. Of course...
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Line 9, column 209, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...aving plenty of charming activities are some of the reasons lying under this fact.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, whereas, for example, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77372923427 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533492822967 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2567051552 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0165353855975 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0057966399403 0.076458572812 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0181024086934 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0105326935498 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210653870997 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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