: some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries.. However, other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the Internet. discuss both view and give opinion
In the era of globalization, the knowledge about other cultures and countries is substantially essential for individuals. While many people argue that surfing the Internet is beneficial to absorb the insight of the world, I am of the opinion that going out of borders is far more effective.
On the one hand, a number of people argue for the merits of Internet on learning about the world. One explanation for that is nowadays with the aid of modern technology, Internet has become the resourceful learning environment because tons of information has posed on social networks on a daily basis. As a result, online-study is fast and convenient way to enhance the human horizon. Besides, a real travel might cost a huge amount of money and time-consuming while Internet is free and available to access. This lead to chances for people from lower-class gain the knowledge of other cultures.
On the other hand, advocate the paramount importance of traveling in reality. A convincing reason is the uncertain quality of information on the digital networks. There are a huge reservoir of learning is exaggerated due to particular purpose of writers. For example, a conglomerate published their positive financial condition in one economic magazines to attract investors from security market albeit the deficit in their spending. Moreover, traveling bring travelers not only theoretical knowledge but also hand-on experience which are critical for people to reap the fruition in their future career. These travelers are more likely to become confident and determinant than netizens who spend most of time surfing online.
In conclusion, although Internet is an useful service to facilitate human learning process, I claim that a trip in real life is associated with more significant advantages.
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...iated with more significant advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32746478873 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01866137628 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584507042254 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4878885695 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.071428571 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189236187498 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630882942565 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423689138432 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10400905344 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449428849182 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.