The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lesson in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Within society, there is a growing problem in regards to obesity. Factors such as technological advancements within the transport system and the use of apps have strongly facilitated a sedentary lifestyle, in a like manner, recent studies have shown the dramatic impact physical education can have on society, in particular, information children receive at school can directly affect their behaviour in their adult lives and help them avoid possible health issues, such as obesity, in the future.
Physical education lessons are not mandatory within school in the United Kingdom. This allows children to avoid gaining the essential knowledge required to live a balanced lifestyle. They are uninformed in their youth which can become a problem in their adult life as an uneducated person cannot make the right decisions on their diet. Thus lead to weight-related diseases, such as diabetes and hypertension that, in the majority of cases, are self-inflicted. This unfortunately has a domino effect on the health-care system, increasing waiting-lists and hospitals become under-staffed which is unfair to patients with hereditary conditions.
If children were given the opportunity to acquire the essential information on health, they would learn about the positive effects it can have on their mental health as a result of the endorphins produced by their body. Furthermore it will become a part of their routine, as they get older it will enjoy sports and continue with it. Future generations are more likely to follow suit as they become parents they will be able to educate their children and provide nutritious meals and have activity be part of their lives, hence gradually relieving the strain from the NHS over the next few decades.
The classes children receive at school can directly affect their behaviour in their adult lives and help them avoid possible health issues, such as obesity. In addition this would be a catalyst in decreasing obesity nation wide and reducing the overwhelming pressure on the healthcare system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, so, thus, in addition, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34161490683 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86127165896 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552795031056 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.7782450362 49.4020404114 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.333333333 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131211984872 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553969845157 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368772403486 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0847595132227 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303447827751 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.