Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
When it comes to what is the essence of education, some people may think that training the students to meet the need of society may be the answer of the question. To transform this into the truth, the supporters claim that the education system should restrain our mind and spirits. However, the opponent said that the our nature should not be formed by any people except ourselves, which is exactly what the formal is doing. From my perspective, I support the later. Both of the minds and spirits should not be restrained, which may betray the formal education. The reasons are as follows.
To start with, the education is becoming more and more commercialize. This lead to the fact that the student have to choose the field which may bring them a great deal of money in the future but not those they truly like. For example, in recent two year, the amount of students whose major is finance of accounting is increasing. Whereas more students in the finance university said that they cannot finish their study very well and feel regret for losing the chance to learn what they like.
Furthermore, by letting us to attending the standardize test, the education produce the machine, which is best in facing of the test but not solving the problem, but not a human. For most students in Chinese university, they hate the College Entrance Exam even if it is of essence for them to get further education. One of the most important reason is that the Exam is a standardize exam. The students get bored when they repeat the content of the exam again and again.
What is more, the privatization of the education is another evil for restraining our mind. This is based on the fact that when the field that will shape one's mind such as music or art is pritvatize, the investor, such as our parents, will focus more on the output but not the enjoyment of these field. As a result, we pat too much attention on the honor they could bring to us.
To sum up, the formal education tends to restrain our mind but not shape our mind. The students have the right to choose what the wish to learn. Also, the education should not blackmailed by the government as well as the market.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 315, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'our'?
Suggestion: the; our
...pirits. However, the opponent said that the our nature should not be formed by any peop...
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Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...Furthermore, by letting us to attending the standardize test, the education produce the machine...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...st important reason is that the Exam is a standardize exam. The students get bored when they ...
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Line 9, column 177, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'blackmail'
Suggestion: blackmail
...o learn. Also, the education should not blackmailed by the government as well as the market...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, whereas, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, to start with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59640102828 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42537596459 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491002570694 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2583061482 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214829142943 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682493153752 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108784547714 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134146360333 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102170746644 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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