Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education comes in different forms, it depends on self to acknowledge various part of knowledge. The prompt recommends that formal education restrains our mind rather than setting them free. As the human brain developes, one can enhance knowledge for daily life as well as from the book related variety of fields. In my opinion, I mostly disagree that education restraining the human brain.
Firstly, education is the only wealth one can restore for themself for life. For example, there are many cases in the society in which opulent business persons had a declivity of wealth. As long as a person is educated, he/she can find a way to generate income. Education provided in the primary and secondary level can be considered as formal education. Mundane routine to get the formal education can be painstaking to many. However, this behavior of gaining education makes one aware about different field and oppurnuties in different field. For example, physicist Albert Eistine, would have never posulated about black hole if he had not had formal education about subject science in his early phase of brain development. Hence, education is the process of exploration which could be achieved by the first making aware about the field among a variety of oppurnuties.
Futhermore, education leads us to the path of enlightenment in which one can discover more about the field in which they would like to pursue a career. To determine one's passion one need to explore a thorough variety of options, education makes awareness a variety of options and about the passion. However, different counties had a different approach of educating students. Achieving education in the field in which you are not intrested might be difficult for many people. Hence, approach of providing education can be changed rather then eliminating formal education.
In conclusion, the purpose of formal education is guidence students to find their intresting majors so it has certain rules to improve student's talent.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 166, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...d like to pursue a career. To determine ones passion one need to explore a thorough ...
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Line 9, column 537, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...oviding education can be changed rather then eliminating formal education. In c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, so, then, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2492211838 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75373196969 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560747663551 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9788220816 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.6111111111 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199580104668 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725093003192 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741777814344 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122771884138 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569312199935 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.