The charts below show percentage of water used by different sectors in Sydney, in 1997 and 2007.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show percentage of water used by different sectors in Sydney, in 1997 and 2007.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare the water usage of various sectors of the economy in Sydney, in
two years – 1997 and 2007.

Overall, it is clear that the sector which used the highest percentage of water was the food
industry. The percentage of total water use by the service industry sector in 2007 was
almost double the figure for 1997.

The proportion of total water use fell in three sectors in 2007, compared with the year
1997. The food industry accounted for 48% of all water usage in 1997, but only 41% in
2007. Manufacturing and the building industry also witnessed a decrease in the
percentage of water used, falling to 11% and 2%, respectively, of total water usage in
2007.

By contrast, there was an increase in the proportion of total water use in the other two
sectors. The water used by the service sector rose from 13% in 1997 to 25% of the total
in 2007. Household use increased slightly to reach 21% of the total in 2007.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... in 2007, compared with the year 1997. The food industry accounted for 48% of all ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 791.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65294117647 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37190154834 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488235294118 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 228.6 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3738553669 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8888888889 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 5.23603664747 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 3.83414634146 313% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286947059987 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152056546561 0.103423049105 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552976021642 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124758526853 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490167329338 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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