Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history.
In recent years, people are exposed to various kinds of technology and science. For instance, smart phone had been appeared around 8 years ago. However, it was one of the fastest development products in these days. We might use smart phones as computer these days. Furthermore, not only smart phones, but also other products, such as cleaner, computer and so on. On the other hand, these technology and science were coming from history. People have invested new products by uncomfortable moments from history. So many people still have focused on stories in past.
As times go by, people need to concentrate to technology and science because of the speed of them. They have been increased so fast, so people might need enough time to adapt developing products. Be good at adapting on speed in the present, we might try to focus on science and technology. Today, many types of science and technology have been come out to us, so many scientists and teachers said people need to focus on new types of section in development like science and technology. For instance, not only students but also elder people need to spend time on studying about new technologies and science facts for adapting in the long run.
On the other hand, how can people develop the technology and science? Scientist and inventors found their thinking from uncomfortable moments in our lives. People had tried to solve problems because of their convenience and evolving. They reported their problems in the past, and we can have improved our lives than before. All of science and technology are having their own history. History has not only the fact of past but also present and future. It is based on the present and the future, so people could improve. So, we should know about our history to get better invention. For example, people didn’t do the internet in each phone and they felt uncomfortable; however, this fact of history can invent the smart phone in the present.
History is one of the precious evidences in the past. Each country has their own history, and their own characteristics. For instance, in Korea, the ‘politeness’ is the most important part of personality of Koreans. So, we have learnt the education of politeness since we were very young. Of course, in primary school, students had learnt the method of tea drinking, like washing a cup before pouring tea and how to boil water. This kind of lectures made student bond with ancestors in the past. We can understand their own cultures and we can transfer the culture to fit on the present.
Many people think that focusing on science and technology is important these days for adapting. It is important to adapt the speed of developing. On the other hand, all kinds of improving are come from history. Based on the understanding of the history, we might develop our lives than before.
- The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. 56
- The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 73
- The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average of number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. 67
- These days, many school-aged children own a smart phone.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at 250 words. 56
- These days, many school-aged children own a smart phone.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at 250 words. 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 383, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technology' or 'these technologies'?
Suggestion: this technology; these technologies
... computer and so on. On the other hand, these technology and science were coming from history. P...
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Line 1, column 556, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ny people still have focused on stories in past. As times go by, people need to conc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, so, still, for example, for instance, kind of, of course, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 41.998997996 198% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 484.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91115702479 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71029258868 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446280991736 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 16.0721442886 205% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.10325555 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0303030303 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6666666667 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273952624252 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747505618458 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609369895189 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168744018885 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052584123673 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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