People can solve important problems in their daily life on their own or with the help from families. The help from the government is no necessary. Agree or disagree
As we are confronting with important problems of ourselves in daily life, I believe in most occasions we solve these problems on our own or by our family. Most of us are educated well and we should handle our own business without the help of the authority. Meanwhile, as we are considering the relationship between individuals and the governments if there are troubles we need to solve in the daily life, the authority in most occasions is the rule maker while not the God who could save us. I will address my view as follows.
To begin with, there is an old saying in China that the most integrity official cannot handle family affairs well. It is true that when we solve important problems especially the family issues, both the insiders and outsiders could not perceive the case as a whole. Thus, the family would appreciate the attitude of the government which could help them with nothing. In China, there is a tradition that the adults should adopt their parents who are getting old. While due to the great pressure of the people brought by the rapid development of the society, some of them could not take care with enough time and energy, let alone the money. Then some government officials went to call these people back from the work to adopt their parents. It is ridiculous that if they get back, some of them would lose the job which means they would have no money to survive. Thus I would like to assume that the government would have better not take care of this business which is ruled by the traditional ethics of Chinese.
In addition, there are many important problems which could not be solved by the government. Individual progress, for instance, one can not make progress with the help of the government if he does not make any efforts, even if the government offer the opportunity to people of studying for free. As personal progress is one of the most important problems today, it is still the business of ones' own, I saw lots of teenagers dropped out of school which was free for them as a policy of the government, while they still learned nothing except for stealing or robbing in the street which they believe these are more efficient way to be rich. There are lots of news like this on TV in China as the helping the poverty is far enough for the poor people in China, some of them need help in mind instead of the money.
Finally, I believe the government as the role make could benefit all the people for public issues while not personal problems. While that does not mean the government could not help people with their own problems which are important to them. If every law and regulation was run well in the country, I believe there will be fewer problems everyone would have to deal with.
In all, as educated people, we should handle the business of our own instead of asking the government for help, which I believe is a more mature way to all of us. This is an important attitude we should have.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lic issues while not personal problems. While that does not mean the government could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, still, then, thus, well, while, except for, for instance, in addition, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57088846881 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39625226877 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429111531191 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.8350427349 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.142857143 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1904761905 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290155762919 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912654546217 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077487575916 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163505487308 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419107137922 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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