Most artists earn low salaries and therefore should receive findings from the government in order for them to continue with their work.
To what extent do you agree?
Two days ago,there was an article about artists in Kazakhstan. In the article, the author highlighted that artists are in need of financial backup due to the low salary. This leads one to wonder whether governments should pay extra money to artists. This essay agrees with the idea of financial aid for the following reasons.
The first reason is that this aid will help artists to develop their skills in art. Artists need a governmental support in order to refine their skills. Once they improve their competency in artwork, they will be able to produce high-quality performances to entertain audience and, therefore, boost the public interest in art. For example, according to the top manager of the main theater in Karaganda city, while being provided with financial assistance by the state, his artists have started to take new plays to perform on stage, which in turn have attracted many visitors.
Another reason for financial support to artists is that artists can fully commit to art. Unless the government allocate extra pay for artists, they have to take part-time jobs, which reflects on culture. However, as soon as, the government supply them with extra funding, they can abandon their additional occupation and fully immerse in art. This results in cultural development. For instance, many artists stopped selling clothes in the local market, once the authorities agreed to raise their salary by twenty percent annually.
However, some economists claim that the government should not support artists. The main argument for this point of view is that there are more important occupations to support. As well as artists, teachers and medical staff have low salaries and need extra pay from the government, but if the authorities allocate aid to artists, then they will have to decrease the wages in education and health care, which will negatively affect their work. Despite this, the work of artists is also significant as it enriches people spiritually and culturally.
In conclusion, artists should certainly receive a decent help from the government as this will allow them grow in qualifications and leave extra jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
Two days ago,there was an article about artists in Kazakhs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20809248555 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64189042503 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554913294798 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7645586375 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2222222222 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240879395137 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775289230562 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418255407138 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146082960811 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262586536289 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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