Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that following news and information about celebrities and famous people are so popular with people ages 14 to 25. There are several social and psychological factors associated with this fact which I am going to explain some of them. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
First and foremost, young people looking for successful examples to imitate. One firm direction did not still shape in young people mind. They are interested in collecting information which could help them to find their own goals and way in the future life. Celebrities are wealthy people who a lot of people like them. It is quite reasonable that young ones follow their opinions, because they think, it could be a way that can straight forward them to such those wealth and social attention.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that plenty of media and networks spend huge money on advertising and sharing news of famous people. These companies obtain remarkable money from these types of advertisements. Therefore, they try to increase their profit by making impressive stories about famous people to take people attention. Meanwhile, young members of society who have just a few experiences trap by advertisements. However, older people simply ignore these advertisements.
Finally, yet importantly, human desires and interests change over time. Happens and events which can excite young people are not important for older ones. For example, parents have a lot of responsibility for their children. They are too busy to have even a quick glance at information related to celebrities.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than older people. Because young people need some examples to find their own way, and extensive advertisements are more successful to deceive young people than older ones, and older people are so busy with their daily tasks.
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 76
- TPO 39 - integrated writing 3
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. 71
- Do you agree or not?Because people are busy doing so many things, they do very few things well. 76
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...d in collecting information which could help them to find their own goals and way in the future l...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this wealth' or 'those wealths'?
Suggestion: this wealth; those wealths
... that can straight forward them to such those wealth and social attention. Another signi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, while, for example, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22379603399 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82529868758 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526912181303 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6573299273 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0526315789 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329974435429 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101666710552 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135626900081 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199158212237 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131569457598 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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