Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think that it is a waste of time.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In Kazakhstan, there is a concern in society about the importance of art subjects since they occupy more than twenty wife percent of the time children spend studying at school. Some teachers think that these disciplines are important to teach at school while others claim that they are unproductive. This essay agrees with the idea that art is redundant in school curriculum for the following reasons.
The main reason why I think that art subjects are not beneficial for schoolchildren is that there are more important subjects to study at schools. After they graduate from school, many young people get employed as engineers, economists, and lawyers. Therefore, while they are at school, they should be studying more necessary subjects like maths, physics and history than music and literature, which are practically useless to their future employment. For example, as part of experiment, some schools, in Karaganda city, substituted art subjects with vocational subjects to see how fast the students could find jobs as soon as they left school. The result exceeded the expectancy because they had better qualifications than those students with no changes in curriculum.
However, some teachers claim that it is necessary for children to study art at school. By studying it, children would learn to appreciate the beauty of the world. If art were excluded from school syllabus, then pupils would be unaware of beautiful pictures, songs and theater plays. Consequently, they would feel inferior to those who study art as an extra-curriculum activity. For example, in the former USSR, because they had not taught art at school, many students found it unpleasantly difficult to answer the questions, which are mostly regarding art, asked by students from the USA.
In conclusion, although art is essential in life, students can learn apart from school subjects. I believe that pupils should not study art disciplines and concentrate more on other subjects, such as physics and maths, as they can improve their career prospects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, apart from, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28395061728 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79563532918 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.13462131 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.133333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280027854494 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106757889696 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698237535986 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182029276724 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646787245998 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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