Music and Education
Music is combination of tones that produce a beautiful sound. While education is thinking person’s level measured from the level of the school after person around. According to some people, the both are most important on the future of the person’s own. Not only some people think music that can support a person’s career, but also the others people think education that can support future.
Firstly, some people believe music that can support a person’s career. They think that because a lot of people are successful with the music. But in my opinion do not like this, because I think music is just supporting factor to success but it is not the first factor to be successful. And I think without the music people can still to be success.
Secondly, some people others think education that can support future of the person’s own. Most people measure the intelligence of person from the education level. And many people think that higher the level of education can will be person more successful. But I also do not agree with the opinion. Because in reality, although many people with a high education but do not get good job.
Thirdly, some people think music that can support a person’s career, and others think education that can support a person’s future. In my opinion, the both are important to make people success but it is not the first factor. Because there are many other factor that make person’s can be successful. For example the other factor is patience and diligence.
In summary, some people think music and aducation is most important on the future of the person’s own. But I think I am disagree with the both of them. My opinion, the both will be better if get balance and supported by other factors.
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