Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Extreme sports have been becoming the accelerating tendency all over the world in recent years which creates a sense of refreshment and emancipation. Although this form of sports contains some potential hazards. From my perspective, the government should not enact the law to prohibit because of its underlying effects.

When it comes to the merits of these sports, conspicuously, there are various prospects make a significant contribution to preserving the human physical and mental system. The plain truth is that extreme sports afford the valuable and fundamental method to gain the ability to stay centered and remain long-term health. Particularly, the jumping airplane person actually changes the chemical makeup of their mind, generating the ability to be more capable of staying calm during stressful situations. Simultaneously, thanks to the process of executing the specifically strenuous movements, the participant might completely achieve the practice of high caloric burn and utilization of muscle which culminates in the fitness of the body. As a result, both physical and mental conditions are totally improved and enhanced in a positive way.

In comparison with the beneficial aspects brought by extreme sports, obviously, there are some the capacity of causing a handful of downsides to players. Affirmatively, the excruciating injuries or even solemn deaths impinged by carrying out extreme sports are always existing. In fact, none of the things are absolutely secure, some technical failures, such as falling helmet protection or broken the connection string during the playing time. Threating the joiner to the fatal situation due to an unexpectedly accidental case, afflicting human lives. In addition, the extravagant of money for taking part in this kind of sports is paid without life insurance involved and go along with no organization burden.

To conclude, people should be free to enjoy extreme sports as long as they well understand the risky circumstances and take the appropriate precautions.

Votes
Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tions are totally improved and enhanced in a positive way. In comparison with the beneficial a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so, well, even so, in addition, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57096774194 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0412717779 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664516129032 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4417570623 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.357142857 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154530996909 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449436814556 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372573352635 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924527877377 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328787512747 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.18 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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