The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately 1/3 of its original force. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the 20 floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."
The owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment predicted in the letter that profits of his complex will increase by restricting water flow throughout all twelve buildings in his complex. His assumption is based on a trial operated on the first 3 buildings among these twelves, that the showerheads of the three were adjusted to maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. The owner deems that residents will not complaint if the plan implemented since he only received a few concerns about low water pressure in the first three complexes. At the first glance, the letter seems plausible, however, with a thorough scrutinize, it fraught with flaws and holes.
First of all, Just by stating that there is only a few complaints about low water pressure, the author can not conclude that their residents are not bothering by the water adjustment. It is very likely that the majority of the residents in the first three buildings already felt the problems brought by low water pressure to their life, for example, it would take them longer time to wash their dishes and taking showers, and they are considering moving to other places. In this case, the company needs to recover the water supplement as it used to be to stop further profit lose, and it would be a disaster if the manager followed the owner’s recommendation.
Secondly, it would be too bold to make the prediction before the actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment released. From the small cases of complains, it is obvious that water pressure has significantly reduced after the modulation. As the water pressure drop, the total water usage is likely to increase due to longer time of use per time. Wash dishes, for example, to remove the grease, it would take longer time if the water stream is small, then the 5 minute dish wash time might prolong to 15 minutes, and people would be so frastrited. By considering the risk of increasing water usage, it would be to soon to say that the Corporation would benefited from the water adjustment.
Thirdly, even if the water usage dropped in the first three complex and residents are taking it, it does not mean the rest of eight complex will show the same result to water adjustment. It might be the case that the water pressure is already low in the rest of 8 buildings due to the higher floors, then further reducing might lead to no water supply in the top floor of the buildings, lack of water supply will be vitiate the status of other facilities of the building, and it will be a lot more cost to fix it compare the money they save from water bill. Without exclude the situations like I mentioned above, it would not be wise to started adjustment to the rest of eight buildings.
To sum up, the owner failed to provide strong evidence to support his assumptions. Imprudent strategy may cause severe problems in a long run, the manager need a lot more information to validate the owner’s predication before taking actions.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 519 350
No. of Characters: 2397 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.773 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.604 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 628, Rule ID: TO_TOO[5]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... of increasing water usage, it would be to soon to say that the Corporation would ...
^^
Line 5, column 670, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
... soon to say that the Corporation would benefited from the water adjustment. Thirdly, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 514, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'compares'?
Suggestion: compares
...nd it will be a lot more cost to fix it compare the money they save from water bill. Wi...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76107899807 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59878004662 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472061657033 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2416496404 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.352941176 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5294117647 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196594462835 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665412235054 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621539328728 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109528648658 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077947681507 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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