The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?
There is no denying that people become extravagent.Today pass time activity of most of young generation centered on shopping.It is worth considering that can lead to dissatisfication and negative impact on society.I wholeheartly believe that this trend should be changed in thsi essay will support the the view with arguments in following paragraphs.
I strongly agree with the opine that firstly,Its bring dissatifaction among people who cannot afford such thing.Most of people in every society have not much resources to get all the things and become distressed which also leads to many crimes.For example many criminal who have been interviewed indicate that most of them were neglected by society and they intended towords negativity.Secondly,people are becoming extravagant buying good which merely used them and put off.For instance peoples become more conscious about brands in my country ladies purchase designer out fitt and wear thwn hardly one time and through it off on the other hand world is suffering from hunger.
Besides,this excessive shopping causes pollution all the goods and appliences comes in packaging wich cause pollution of earth and also use of energy.In addition many material cannot eassyily dispose off like polyethene bags burning causes air pollution.because of which many people are being suffered by respiratory diseases.
on the other hand young population have more stressed and anxious,because they are more materialistic they want replacement of one thing by other.Even though according to them these thing bring happiness and satisfication in life.
In this essay we discussed the major oppisitive impacts of today trend of shopping towards youth.according to me which causes diversifing effects as whole.Some kind of physical activities should be leisure activites which are also inexpensive and healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61428571429 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29516497992 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657142857143 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 20.2975951904 276% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 160.455102755 49.4020404114 325% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 314.4 106.682146367 295% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.0 20.7667163134 270% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.8 7.06120827912 365% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131998584247 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791063301811 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689246760848 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791063301811 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689246760848 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.0 13.0946893788 252% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.28 50.2224549098 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 11.3001002004 243% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.15 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.15 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.4 10.1190380762 241% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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