Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the basic education is the fundamental part of each person training which have an essential role in the success of individuals and society as a whole. Contrary, to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that students who enter to universities are intelligent people that society managers should assign considerable money to power their education programs. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that for the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities.
First and foremost, an appropriate primary education could increase the number of future students at universities. Providing good educational facilities and teachers will rise the quality of education which students obtain. It not only improves the level of students' knowledge, but also it will raise the enthusiasm of students for learning in school. For example, when during primary school children have this opportunity to learn the basic information about music, arts and science, instructors could identify students with exceptional talents in each filed. Through training children in their specific field of interest and intelligence, society will have more gifted people in the future years.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that a propel basic education could reduce the rate of criminal behavior in society and especially among young people and teenagers. In the poverty areas of cities, poor families and parents with addiction to drugs or opioids force their children to involve in crimes. However, a corresponding education could prevent a lot of these children from contributing in criminal activities.
Finally, yet importantly, all of people in each community would not enroll to the universities, nevertheless, the basic school is a critical step in shaping children personality and characters. Giving more budget to school increases their possibility for better educational environment and educational plans which will raise happiness and positive moods among young children. In the long-term, it can grantee mental health and ethic and happiness in countries.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that government should spend more money on education of very young children than spend money on universities, because it give more potential talented people in the future, and this work can diminish the rate of violence behavior in society, and because it increases happiness in society.
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 76
- Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 71
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 78
- TPO-15 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47536945813 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93508124002 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.273641484 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.2 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0666666667 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328274505321 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10636401425 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158474741668 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189226869052 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122090562732 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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