SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The argument that Super Corporation made the best decision to move from Middleburg to Corporate City is flawed. Assumptions including making vaguely defined statements, trusting a survey without including the methods, and comparing ill-defined numbers renders the argument invalid.
The argument claims that the Corporate City is a "superior place to live," this is flawed because superior can be defined in so many ways. In the argument, the reason Corporate City is superior is because there was a recent surge in homeowners. However, they could be moving there because it is cheaper not because it is superior. This argument could be improved if it included other reasons why the Corporate City is superior. Examples include information about its environment, school districts, and nightlife.
Super Corporation has also made the mistake of basing its argument on a survey. Surveys are highly subjective and variable and do not guarantee the actions of its participants. Additionally, surveys can have biases if the they word questions in biased ways or if the population sample is not inclusive of all employees. For example, if Super Corporation took a small sample population in their company, the survey would likely be misrepresentative of the beliefs of all employees. Super Corporation could strengthen their argument by including their methods of collecting such information.
The claim that the recent surge in the number of home owners proves that Corporate City is a superior place compared to Middleburg is flawed because it does not include any context. It is possible that Middleburg has experienced overall growth over the last ten years, while Corporate City has only seen growth in the last year. In this case, Middleburg would be superior, rendering the argument invalid.
Because Super Corporation makes assumptions about the definition of a "superior place to live," the results of surveys, and the number of new home owners surging to Corporate City, Super Corporation's argument is invalid.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- need to argue "making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one"
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1659 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.233 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.848 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.885 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ument claims that the Corporate City is a 'superior place to live,' thi...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...e City is a 'superior place to live,' this is flawed because superior can be...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
...dditionally, surveys can have biases if the they word questions in biased ways or if the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mall sample population in their company, the survey would likely be misrepresenta...
^^
Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...kes assumptions about the definition of a 'superior place to live,' the...
^
Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...nition of a 'superior place to live,' the results of surveys, and the number...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45741324921 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.037361845 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485804416404 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6468052731 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.125 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8125 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9375 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119267645002 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491681219461 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550392878155 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779403036459 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441847286263 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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