A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city?
A famous proverb that says “all coins have two sides” it means one is good and the other is bad. But, it is exceptional about my city. I am living in Herat city. So, it is located in west of Afghanistan. So, if some persons have plan to visit my city or town or stay for few months or days, they will enjoy or like our cultures, hospitality, different foods, Herat city has an ancient place ARG. On the other hand, they will dislike security. However, all in all they will love to stay in my city Herat.
At the first, in Herat we have good culture and this culture consist of different traditional foods. For instance, native people know how to make a special food that people call it (KICHERY). At the first, they put rice on the water for few hours and then add them some spices with cereals and then mix all of them together and add them at the boiling water. After, few hours they are ready for eating and they are really delicious. So, I believe if a person diced to stay or move to my city that person will enjoy or like from that moments. However, another important issue is hospitality my people has more respect for that phenomenon or hospitality. So, I spoke with different people how visited my city or town all people have the same idea that we love your hospitality. On the other hand, some persons maybe dislike or do not love our security because we are in strike for near five decades and it is not easy. We don’t have enough security to visit natural places. In fact, out of city some terrorists are visible on their. So, we don’t love that.
Second, Herat is an ancient place in Afghanistan. So, I advise my foreign friends to visit that and they will enjoy or like that place. Due to, has ancient place like, ARG it was a place for kings and family members that they lived there and there has old miniatures or hand craft and they can see the original map of Afghanistan and they can enjoy some arts that belong to 1000 BC it is interesting and they will like there. Many tourists visit ARG and they write few books and articles about their and how the kings lived there. But, we have just one problem that is lack of security that they will dislike that and if they have some bodyguard it is done or solvable. And they will enjoy or love their plan.
To summarize, my city is Herat and it has very natural places for visits and we have nice cultures such as foods, hospitality and culture full people and Herat is an ancient place and has some historic place like, ARG a place that king and his family members lived there and there are some arts on the walls that belong to 1000 BC. On the other hand, we have some problem like lack of security that they cannot go to visit other places out of city. But, I think it is solvable by some bodyguards.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 13.8261648746 275% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33843212237 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19698648873 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401529636711 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.494869976 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.037037037 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3703703704 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141719726892 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451980975328 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497742800426 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947511720371 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405628928406 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.57 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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