Some people believe the most important reason to be wealthy is the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Quite a number of people believe that the major reason for being wealthy is the privilege of help that other individuals enjoy from it. In my own opinion, i totally disagree with this view because there are more significant reasons, which range from improved standards of living to increased social status, for attaining financial freedom.
To begin with, being wealthy is often associated with better living standards compared with the poor. High standards of living include enjoying good health and security. Wealthy people have enough money to purchase healthy food items which would keep them in good condition. Furthermore, they can afford the best healthcare available when they are sick. For example, the rich citizens of Nigeria don't access care within the country, rather that travel out to the first world to get expert care. In addition, the wealthy are more secure because they have the funds to drive bullet proof cars and build well-secured houses where thieves cannot easily have access. This further improves their standards of living.
Another Possible justification for being affluent is increased social status. Social strata is a measure of how highly important and honoured someone is. In fact, in some countries, only the rich can become leaders. This can be described as the "power of wealth". They have opportunities to connect with more highly placed people. The resultant effect of this connection would most likely make them more relevant in the society, thus, increasing their social level the more.
In conclusion, opportunities to help others may be a basis to become a financially strong-man, however, there are better, more fulfilling reasons to becoming wealthy. Therefore, i fully disagree that helping others is the supreme basis to becoming opulent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35563380282 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61974433956 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619718309859 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7495916356 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4705882353 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7058823529 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171382190752 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503703183829 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054097349067 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107133938438 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368441313274 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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