The given diagram below demonstrates the process in which the electricity is manufactured by using water.
The general view of the process gives main informations. The process with complicated and modern machines includes 03 basic steps , starting with evaporating water of the sea’s surface and ending with providing consumers with electricity from transformer stations.
The first step is electricity generation from water. Firstly, the water molecules in the surface of seas were evaporated by effecting of thermal radiation from sun. Secondly, rising molecules which are condensed make a droplet and gradually, the droplets gather together to form clouds in the sky. The reservior built with dam keeps water from the rains made from these leaden clouds. When the valve opens, the water flows into the turbine through water pipe. At that time, the power of water currents which revolves the wheel of turbine to start the electric generator, is transformed into electricity. After that, the generated electricity is converted to high voltage to keep away from waste when it is transmitted. The end, the water comes back reservior because of the action of the pump.
The seconds step is the transmission and change of current of high potential. Firstly the electricity made by electric generator is transmitted into the big and modern grid by high voltage cables. This is the current of high potential which is not the type of electricity for everyday use we have been hoping for. Therefor, before it can be use, we need not only one transformer station but also a system including stations to step down the voltage.
The last step is electricity distribution. The electricity is given from the last transformer station to consumers by underground cables in these places, examples: factories, houses, hospitals, schools.... People use it for labour, daily activities, teaching and learning,...
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'diagrams'.
Suggestion: diagrams
The given diagram below demonstrates the process in which...
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Line 2, column 58, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...of the process gives main informations. The process with complicated and modern mac...
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Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... modern machines includes 03 basic steps , starting with evaporating water of the ...
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Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lectricity from transformer stations. The first step is electricity generation fr...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... daily activities, teaching and learning,...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly activities, teaching and learning,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 965.302439024 167% => OK
No of words: 301.0 196.424390244 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3488372093 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89131822269 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 106.607317073 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56146179402 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 283.868780488 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 15.0 4.33902439024 346% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9735366365 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4444444444 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7222222222 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61111111111 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.09268292683 391% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123408589243 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456567630303 0.103423049105 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540126941373 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902723334304 0.15604864568 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076756998592 0.0819641961636 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 40.7170731707 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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