Many people associate money with happiness and think that more money one has,the happier they should be.do you agree or disagree?

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Many people associate money with happiness and think that more money one has,the happier they should be.do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Ielts... on Sun, 06/02/2019 - 00:31

Money has been linked to happiness by many people and they believe in the thought of more the merrier. I completely disagree with this notion , as happiness is the mental state which is associated with many factors ,money being one of them and not the soul reason for everyone’s happiness.

Happiness is a sense of joy felt by us after achieving our desires. It can be described as a state of complete satisfaction. For an artist it can be felt when his/her work is appreciated and recognised , similarly for teenagers it can be after securing good grades. Thus ,talent ,good grades and mental peace can not be bought by money. To exemplify, lord Buddha was born with a silver spoon in his mouth and was suppose to rule the kingdom ,however he found his inner peace in serving humanity. This clearly shows that for many people money is nothing but just a basic need to live a life.

Moreover ,many billionaires and top celebrities have fallen prey to depression or commited suicide even though being financially stable. One such example is of bollywood actress Deepika Padukone ,who was diagnosed with depression few years back. Despite being a highest paid actress and having a successful career she was not happy. If money would have been the source of happiness ,we would have not heard this real life stories. Although there are many people who support this view of money being the treasure house of happiness ,it does not hold true for everyone.

In conclusion, mental state contributes to greater extend for being happy and cheerful in life rather than money.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, thus, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87360594796 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57405929212 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624535315985 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9506703703 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6428571429 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.01903807615 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306896097549 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108963210353 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863884634575 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209640975303 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111295454102 0.056905535591 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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