The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps present the differences between the way to a city hospital in 2007 and that in 2010.

According to the map in 2007, the way to a city hospital is much more simple in comparison to that in 2010. For example, people just need to go straight along the Hospital Road instead of going on the round-about. However, this access also has some drawbacks. First of all, the bus stop is too far from the hospital, that makes people feel inconvenient cause they'll have to walk or take a taxi. Secondly, the car park for both the staff and the public is very small which is crowded and chaotic. Finally, there was not any round-about on Ring Road and City Road, that may lead to traffic congestion and other problems.

On the other hand, in 2010, the access to a hospital becomes more convenient and more logical. It is surrounded by Ring Road which is the same as the year 2007 but there are some differences. For instance, in front of the hospital, there is a bus stop connecting to 2 round-about on Ring Road and City Road. The staff car park is opposite to the bus stop while the public one stays beside the hospital. Thanks to this development, some difficulties about car park, bus stop, traffic congestion..... can be abated.

In short, with the rebuilding, the way to a city hospital in 2010 is much easier, which helps people a lot against that in 2007.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in short, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1125.0 965.302439024 117% => OK
No of words: 249.0 196.424390244 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51807228916 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56786407437 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 106.607317073 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530120481928 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.540037288 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3571428571 112.824112599 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7857142857 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 5.23603664747 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229550994879 0.215688989381 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084707705273 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864631821968 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174479833225 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06516116382 0.0819641961636 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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