The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparision where relevant

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparision where relevant

The bar chart illustrates regular physical activities performed by man and women of different age groups. The sample covered are from Australia during the year 2010.

Overall, at least 40% of the people were involved in regular physical activities with the only exception being males from age group of 35 to 40, which was just under 40 percent. Within all the age group covered, apart from age group 15 to 24, female percentage of doing physical outnumbered male percentage in all scenarios. The highest difference among male and female is in the age group of 35 to 44, with 13% whereas, least difference is in the age group of 65 and over, with 0.4%.

There was only one instances where number of males involved in physical activities were over 50%, which was within the age group 15 to 24 of 52.8%, the same instances for female occurred within three age groups; 35 to 44 of 52.5%, 45 to 54 of 53.3% and 55 to 64 with 53%.

In conclusion, percentage of females were more involved in physical activities as compared to males within all the age groups, apart from age group 15 to 24, which is the only scenario where percentage males outnumbered percentage females.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the least'.
Suggestion: , the least
... age group of 35 to 44, with 13% whereas, least difference is in the age group of 65 an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, apart from, at least, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 979.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7756097561 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54625735774 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482926829268 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 292.5 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.7061477931 43.030603864 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.857142857 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2857142857 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234385252385 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138546420672 0.103423049105 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763571924787 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172277889664 0.15604864568 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578564313932 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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