The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 word

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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by Thu Phung on Sat, 06/08/2019 - 10:58

The line graph given illustrates the information about how many tourists came to three different Museums, namely British Museum, Science Museum and Natural History Museum over the course of four months in 2013 from June to September.
Overall, the Natural History Museum had a downward trend in the number of tourists whereas there was an increase in the others.
In June, the British Museum was the most popular location, about 600 thousand visitors while just only 550 thousands of people went to the Natural History Museum. At this point, the least favourite tourist attractions where the Science Museum, around 400 thousand travellers.
Over the summer in 2013, the British Museum witnessed a considerable fluctuation in the numbers visitors before going up slightly in September, just over 650 thousand. By contrast, the number of the Science Museum and Natural History Museum declined similarly before growing considerably in September, 450 thousand and 480 thousand respectively. Furthermore, there was a remain stable in the percentage of visitors to the Natural History Museum over the period between July and August, just under 400 thousand.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '550 thousand'.
Suggestion: 550 thousand
...t 600 thousand visitors while just only 550 thousands of people went to the Natural History Muse...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 369, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nd respectively. Furthermore, there was a remain stable in the percentage of visitors to...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, similarly, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 975.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41666666667 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.665155822 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8784797075 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.285714286 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186830372641 0.215688989381 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968718388701 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489088514797 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123169326901 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573121344032 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 11.4140731707 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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