In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both views
Some people often argue that both parents should work to earn more incomes for their families. In my opinion, however, I strongly reckon that children would lack the support and their parents would definitely exert adverse impacts upon their offspring.
On the one hand, working parents will have negative influence on their children for a variety of reasons. Firstly, parents have no idea about where their youngsters are, what they do during their leisure time, what they do at schools and even their academic results at schools. They will spend most of their times with their friends and take risks of suffering from peer pressure. This factor plays a vital part in them getting involved in social evil. For example, teenagers can easily learn from their classmates to smoke, drink beers and wine and some of them would also join gangs, take part in minor criminal activities and become delinquents. Secondly, televisions, social platforms, the Internet become the main influences on children’s behaviors and characteristics.
On the other hand, I think that either mother or father works in one family is the most appropriate. Parents will have enough time to take care of their offspring on leisure and education. The families will always feel cozier and sense of belonging. Also, their schools results and their status at schools will always be improved.
In conclusion, although some people think both parents should work in one family, I personally believe that one of them should stay at home to care for their children as parental roles is a fundamental factor in forming children a good citizenship.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 557, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... smoke, drink beers and wine and some of them would also join gangs, take part in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14015151515 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59502320444 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9264310207 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.384615385 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270651280796 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980674150528 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477215230281 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172018981881 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232237746409 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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