A government spends money on all adults after 25-year-old on a training course for the most up-to-date skills at workplace.Do you think it is effective？ Why or why not？
In these days and age, young people are still under enormous pressure and fierce competition in their job career, although government have supported the young for many years. Thus, when it comes to the topic that whether government should invest in teaching young people the latest skill at workplace, there are increasingly more people who think it is ineffective to support 25-year-old people to take training course.However, as far as I am concerned , it is helpful and effective to support these people to take career-training class.
First, training course could satisfy individual’s needs of higher professionalism. Young people can learn the most up-to-date workplace skill through the training course funded by the government , like communication skill, coöperation with other departments, leadership and so forth. People who are equipped with these useful and essential skills will receive good reputation and encouragement from others, even will be promoted soon. So the training classes are necessary requirements for young people to get improvement of their career. Without these courses, letting young people learn from the mistakes they made to make progress , it not only takes them more time but also have a negative impact for a company on the ground that an employee without these professional skills may easily cause losses.
Additionally, the adult training will promote national sustainable development. Once the young take the training course, social progress and development can be improved. The improvement of employee efficiency will increase of enterprise income,because employees can finish more assignments in less time with fewer mistakes. With the increase of company’s income, the tax gained from these companies will raise as well, which means the government are endowed with more opportunities to support other aspects of society, such as public infrastructure, medical insurance, charity and so on, to create a better living environment for all the citizens. So as to develop social productive forces, boost the development of national economy and enhance national competitiveness.
To sum up, it is true our government had contributed lots of fund on helping the young on their job career. Nonetheless, the support from the government should not be stopped not, which not only benefit individuals’ own development but also the development of the whole country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, nonetheless, so, still, thus, well, as to, such as, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58855585831 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1913975405 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569482288828 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.7688696175 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.5 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2142857143 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167367391786 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575491867865 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523660903931 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975411629765 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440140540391 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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