At the present time, the population of some contries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that the proportion of younger adults is greater than the number of elderly people in some countries. Although there are some drawbacks in this kind of structure, I believe that the benefits is more for the individuals, social and national level.
On the one hand, there are obvious disadvantages of having more young adults in the country. The increase in the number of working age group means a greater job competition in the market. This means that there will be more applicants than job offers which eventually leads to the rise of unemployment rate in the nation. Moreover, young people, who are jobless are force to wander in the streets and maybe influenced to commit crimes to make ends meet and other social problems in the community. Furthermore, the government is expected and pressured to provide additional services such as housing to meet the demand of growing population.
On the other hand, the advantages of having more yooung adults is freatly beneficial in many ways, and I agree. Firstly, the presence of more young people at works means vibrant workforce. These kind of people contribited fresh ideas and new innovations in the company. Secondly, there sill be more people who are willing and able to participate in the community protects and services. This certain age group possess high energy levels and very passionate to achieve whatever they envision for the benefit of their local community. Lastly, with more young people working there will be more taxes to fund government projects such as additional schools and road infrastructures. In addition to that, the economy will flourish and will attracts possible international investors.
In conclusion, I believe that it is more ad advantageous to have a greater number of young people than older people in the population as they immensely contribute in building a strong economy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11726384365 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80653250216 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527687296417 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4162967561 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.733333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462941373655 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410783775435 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101153335484 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344273117508 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.