Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job，but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Young people nowadays face two choices when they search for jobs in the job market. It is true that most of people are likely to do something that they like, but I would I argue that more realistic work that is related people’s living standard and the quality of their lives can be the first choice.
Many people are advocates of choosing job more freely, mainly because they want to do some work that they are interested in and the work efficiency can be assured. Interests are the best teacher, and these people who are happy to devote their time and energy to their jobs cannot only obtain wage but also pleasant time. As an example, young people have been fond of doing sports since they were children, they can work as gym coach in a gym and guide other people to do exercises if they want to work in their favorite fields. As a consequence, they will have a great time every day and work efficiency can also be high, also can get a sense of achievement easily.
Other people believe that doing some more realistic jobs are more important due to the fact that these realistic work are connected high salary and future life quality. For example, people can find a job in some technology giant companies such as Google, Apple, and Huawei, which means that their salary wills much bigger that people who are working in other fields. As a result, these people can live better lives in comparison to people who get the low salary. Although these people are unlikely to have a free work, they can still earn much money to improve their standards of living.
In my opinion, young people should consider the realistic job firstly, because, in this day and age, we need money to maintain our life. Soaring food and energy prices make people hard to make ends meet. If we can work in some companies where they can get high-paying jobs, these young people can save more money for their future in spite of paying a high cost of living. Consequently, they can use their wage to do things what they want in the later.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...jobs in the job market. It is true that most of people are likely to do something that they li...
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Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
... Many people are advocates of choosing job more freely, mainly because they want t...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ough these people are unlikely to have a free work, they can still earn much mone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, so, still, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5467032967 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20811283388 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480769230769 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.9960918914 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.214285714 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311283949175 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134110892279 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485430880943 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224576221982 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196445877211 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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