TPO 28 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and lecture both discuss if Peary reached the North Pole or no. While the reading provides three explanations to support the idea that Peary already catch the North Slope, The professor refutes, saying none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that after the National Geographic society investigation, the committee declared that Peary reached the North Slope. However, the professor argues this notion by saying that this is true that the committee declared that, but this committee was not objective. This is because this committee was done by Peary's friends who got money to fund this trip. In addition, this investigations were just for two days long. So, the results were not accurate or trustful.

Secondly, the reading mentions that Peary reached the North Slope during 37 day as long as Avery's trip. Moreover, Peary used the same tools as Avery during his trip. On the other hand, the professor questions this idea by pointing out that tom's trip is completely different than Peary's trip. For instance, Avery had less weight because he did not travel with food. in addition, the food was dropped by plain. Furthermore, the weather condition during Avery's trip was more favorable than Peary's trip. As a result, this claim did not support the idea that Peary reached the North Pole.

Lastly, the reading states that the shadows of the photo that had been taken by Peary confirms the sun's position in North Pole area. So, this is a great evidence that Peary was there. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by explaining that the technique that used to measure the sun's position is not precise. Furthermore, we can not examine the sun's position that way. Moreover, this Peary took this photo one hundreds years ago with unfocused camera. So, the photo is not accurate and faded with time. Consequently, the shadow blurred and we can not measure the sun's position.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...t money to fund this trip. In addition, this investigations were just for two days l...
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Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... that toms trip is completely different than Pearys trip. For instance, Avery had le...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ht because he did not travel with food. in addition, the food was dropped by plain...
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Line 7, column 421, Rule ID: A_HUNDREDS[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. Consider using: 'one hundred'
Suggestion: one hundred
...y. Moreover, this Peary took this photo one hundreds years ago with unfocused camera. So, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 319.0 270.72406181 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03134796238 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4584238527 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501567398119 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9935337857 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4285714286 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1904761905 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52380952381 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410679914972 0.272083759551 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132127873792 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105776688738 0.0662205650399 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259034880674 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500495765721 0.0443174109184 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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