Do you agree or disagree that Job has greater effect on you overall happiness that social life?
There is no doubt that happiness is an important state for the people. Without it people cannot have healthy life. Some people believe that job can have more influence on our happiness than social life. I refute this idea because. We have more close relationship with people in social life than in the work. Also, we cannot spend sufficient time to socialize in the work atmosphere.
First and foremost, people spend more time on the social life out of the work with their family, pre-existing friends and ordinary individuals. They can make batter condition for us to be happy. From psychological standpoint, people can be happy with their family and old friends more than their colleague because they have close relationship with them. How we can spend life without seeing our family members for a week. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I graduated from university, I applied for a work. Living in a small city, I was compelled to work out of my city. After a while, although I made friendship with some of my colleagues, I got home sick. I explained my situation to my boss, he permitted me to visit my family after a month I started my work. Finally, because I could not tolerate being far away from my precondition of life, I resigned the work.
Another reason which supports the idea social life can greater effect on our happiness than job is lack of interaction in the work place with individuals. It is obvious that when we have social interaction with others, we feel happy. In the work place we cannot spend a lot of time on socializing with our colleagues the same as people out of work. Therefore, we cannot have happy time in the work. No one can deny the hard work time prevents socializing in the work.
In a nutshell, I hold this viewpoint that the social life has better effect on our happiness than the job because we have more close relationship with people in social life and we cannot spend sufficient time on socializing with others in the work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, therefore, while, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67422096317 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63977977714 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43342776204 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.838005963 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0454545455 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146517304696 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538831544879 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634108028591 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132251651057 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569810063236 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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