The author of the letter to the school of Centerville concludes that the solution to reduce the ascendancy of increased accidents around the area is to make the students of the Centerville high school to undertake the program sponsored by the high school. However, the assertion made by the author might hold water if some of the unfounded assumptions he/she made aren’t substantiated would dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument made.
Initially the author asks for the high school sponsored course which is intends to teach the driver’s education to the students as he says the parents cannot afford the course to their children. But the question arises regarding the economic factor of the parents which is not specified in a viable manner that if they are in such an abject condition, then how do they afford the car? If the parents can afford the car, then most of them may also be able to afford the course for their kids. If the author hovers over this topic again taking this into his considerations, answering this question, then that would would increase the credibility of the argument made.
The author fails to accord the actual reason for the accidents but mentions the solution to it. According to the author of the letter who acts as a face of the people(parents), insists about the course which has to be taught in the classrooms. But, the contemporary generation learns more based on the practical approach rather than simply heating the benches of the classrooms treating the act of driving as one of their other class subjects. Moreover, the paucity of the capital needed to handle the course may lead to the failure of the course too as the cognitive skills of the teenagers of current age tend to be better than their reading skills. Thus, the assumptions made by the author if answered in a well manner considering these factors, then that would make the author’s conclusion well ossified.
The Centerville may contain teenagers those who study at different number of high schools. The author fails to mention if it is asserted among all the high schools to make the assertion strong. The author may have sent this letter to only this particular high school being the face of the parents of the teenagers studying at that school itself. Instead the author might have lodged this letter to the government institute to allure the rule over all the education bodies of the Centerville and other surrounded areas. Therefore, the author seriously has to answer these questions to make is argument an acceptable one.
In a nutshell, the while the argument made by the author who is representing the parents of teenagers residing in Centerville tries to assert his solutions. He asserts that to reduce the number of accidents around the area would be reduced by introducing the compulsory education course to the teenagers studying in that particular high school. But, more amount of data is needed before a firm conclusion is reached. Hence, if the author answers the given questions about the parents and the capital asked, it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 530 350
No. of Characters: 2555 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.798 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.821 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.616 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.756 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... made by the author might hold water if some of the unfounded assumptions he/she made aren&...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a viable manner" with adverb for "viable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...r of the parents which is not specified in a viable manner that if they are in such an abject cond...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 613, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: would
...ons, answering this question, then that would would increase the credibility of the argumen...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...h schools to make the assertion strong. The author may have sent this letter to onl...
^^^
Line 7, column 347, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...enagers studying at that school itself. Instead the author might have lodged this lette...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2625.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 528.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97159090909 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71671924331 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439393939394 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2523808924 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.25 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233997910534 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753885861775 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082043125118 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147170868828 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587616063477 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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