You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before.Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter,•give details of your course and your arrival/departure date•explain your accomm

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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter,
• give details of your course and your arrival/departure date
• explain your accommodation needs
• ask for information about getting to and from the college

Dear Sir,

Greetings for the day!

My name is Amanpreet Kaur, resident of Patiala, Punjab. I am so glad to receive an offer letter from your college Conestoga, Kitchener. This is a big opportunity for me to pursue my training course there. However, I am afraid of my accommodation because I have never visited this city before. Therefore, I want to seek your assistance.

Kindly allow me to elaborate on this matter. Firstly, my training course is about hotel management and the duration of this is 6 month that is from 07 August to 09 January. Secondly, as per letter, I will have to present at college before one week, so I will departure from India on 30TH July, and I will arrive there on 03 August.

Further, I will want to stay in a separate room with an attached bathroom as well as a wardrobe. Moreover, It should be not far away from college, because I have a not desire to waste my time in travelling. If possible, please book my room which has adequate sources of sunlight, then I can able to feel the warmth of the sun in winters.

Still, I have other questions in my mind regarding the transportation facility. Is the transport service is provided by your college or I have to arrange myself? If not, then could you give me the details regarding public transportation system with the fares.

I will wait for your positive prompt response.

Yours faithfully,
Amanpreet Kaur.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...efore, I want to seek your assistance. Kindly allow me to elaborate on this mat...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...anagement and the duration of this is 6 month that is from 07 August to 09 January. S...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, as well as, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1165.0 937.175257732 124% => OK
No of words: 247.0 206.0 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71659919028 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75877587014 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623481781377 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 290.88556701 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6019321431 44.8134815571 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.8125 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4375 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 4.34317383033 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257009350164 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818723757951 0.0766984524023 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725465263318 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105550810521 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078929490821 0.0580467560999 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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