Dear Sir,
I am writing in connection with upcoming training course at your collage in Sydney, Australia. I will be there to attend the English course which is going to be held in 13th march for one week.
To tell the truth, I have never been in this city until now, so, I am not familiar with this city not at all. In fact, I am in a urgent need for a flat which could provide a nice atmosphere for studying with a reasonable price. Also, it is really important to be the vicinity of collage which makes commuting easy.
Actually my departure is at 9 AM and I would be really thankful if you could reserve it for me. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
F. BAGHERI
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing in connection with upcoming...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... this city not at all. In fact, I am in a urgent need for a flat which could prov...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, look, really, so, in fact, to tell the truth
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 574.0 937.175257732 61% => OK
No of words: 132.0 206.0 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34848484848 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.38956122427 3.78020617076 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41974013737 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 127.690721649 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651515151515 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 174.6 290.88556701 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9724002071 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.75 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145388876741 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811060379365 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844567232905 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885037108841 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586342669978 0.0580467560999 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 8.37731958763 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.65 8.71597938144 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 41.2886597938 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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