Students study many kinds of subjects in school, such as Mathematics, History, Physics, Science and Technology. Some people think that History is one of the most beneficial school subjects. However, there is also opinion that supports that Science and Technology subjects are more essential than History.
In my opinion, History is an essential school subject because of some reasons. First, through learning History, students can understand about the hardships that were faced by the ancestors, for example during World War or colonialism period. There are many moral values that can be taught to students, such as hard-working, not easily giving up, and having great dedication to the nation. Such moral values are very important, yet now many students don't have those anymore. So, they need to be educated by learning History subject. Second, in History pupils will study about the foundation of many countries in the world, including the foundation of their home countries. Nowadays, many pupils don't really understand of the foundation history about their home countries. Knowing such knowledge will help pupils to be more educated and help increase the students' nationalism feelings. Third, learning History involves memorizing and recalling many detailed things, that will train pupils' right brains.
On the other hand, Science and Technology subjects are also beneficial to the pupils. In this millennial era where technology has developed at great speed, there are a lot of new technology inventions and programs. Of course, students need to know how to master them and how to use them wisely, so that it won't bring negative impacts to their life. Science is also important since it often requires students to solve complex mathematical problems, that will help students develop their left brains. It will also help students acquire new skills such as problem solving and critical thinking.
In conclusion, I concur that History and Science and Technology subjects are equally important. Each of them has their own benefits to the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, really, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, of course, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3746130031 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6347385876 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541795665635 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2182275165 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3684210526 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221471723036 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802493250202 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910023760115 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168577983309 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121478425471 0.056905535591 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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