I live in village of 20,000 population. There are many people of different religion, culture living peacefully. But when is comes to government related works, the government offices are less active they will get activated with bribe or with the support of political leaders. Its hard to finish your governmental work in time. If I have authority to change a thing about my village I would love to change the behavior of government workers.
For this change I need a proof that the officers are taking bribe or they are involved in bribery. Last year when I applied for the certificate of living in my village. It took 3 months to complete a process usually it should take maximum 1 week. With this process I missed the last date of scholarship form. Now I will not get scholarship for upcoming year. one of my friend gave the money he asked and she got her certificate in time. I could not give money he asked me. I badly needed scholarship for paying my college fees. After many request also he denied to help. On the name of fee officers tend to take more money. Many poor people fail to give this fee. They even do not know that these services are free and government is paying for them. Many cases of farm are pending due to this.
For common man its hard to get support of political leaders to get work done. so this option is not available for common man to finish his work. We need to find some other alternatives. It can be possible with the proof of bribery I will inform anti corruption department. They will surely look in this matter and they will transfer all officers regarding this and they will appoint someone new and active. This process will mock everyone working in offices and they will start to work regularly and sincerely.
This change is not easy because in case of corruption both parties are equally responsible one who takes and one who gives. I need to spread public awareness through road shows, Television and many other electronic media. If people will decide that they are going to give a single penny as bribe then officers will not dare to ask for the same.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... finish your governmental work in time. If I have authority to change a thing abou...
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Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
... not get scholarship for upcoming year. one of my friend gave the money he asked an...
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Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...scholarship for paying my college fees. After many request also he denied to help. On...
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Line 2, column 535, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun request seems to be countable; consider using: 'many requests'.
Suggestion: many requests
...rship for paying my college fees. After many request also he denied to help. On the name of ...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... of political leaders to get work done. so this option is not available for common...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54497354497 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41368447315 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531746031746 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7711020614 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.6296296296 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.48148148148 5.45110844103 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0784682496977 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0216249736026 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471563804607 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604454569729 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051072667568 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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