It is an incontrovertible fact that there is more and more advantageous trade for skincare products in many countries. In this essay, the reasons and effects of using productions which make whiten and lighten skin should be illustrated as follows.
The predominant elements leading to the fast growth of skincare products are advertising and beauty. Among which, the main one is too many advertisements about white skin lightening products on the media. According to recent research, people tend to imitate what the celebrities do on TV or the Internet, so the channels pay a huge sum of money for employing celebrities. Furthermore, in the modern era, people do not like dull colour people as a result of increasing profitable trade. Specifically, because women would like to attract lots of attention, they don’t mind to pay any money for beauty.
On the other hand, skincare products lead to the effects on both society and individuals as follows. Because of using it of unknown origin which affects the health of the person. According to recent research, creams made with the harmful chemicals damage the natural skin and people look older at a young age. To continue with my viewpoints, society is also affected, although the majority of people use a large amount of money for these such beauty products, they have not got any improvement in their skin.
To sum up, there are some reasons and effects of skincare products which are mentioned above. It is recommended that if people use the money in an appropriate way for these products, the effects on both society and individuals would be better.
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- The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Cambridge ielts 5, page 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
... not got any improvement in their skin. To sum up, there are some reasons and ef...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ecommended that if people use the money in an appropriate way for these products, the effects on both...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, so, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0223880597 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84551563582 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555970149254 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4339732544 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.538461538 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377093653846 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123435865692 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593339171663 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233166411784 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372939960535 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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