To serve the housing needs of our students,Buckingham college should build a number of new dormitories.Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years.consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
The director of the student housing at buckingham college says that to meet the housing needs of students the college should build new dormitories. also, since college enrollment is growing and by trends it would double in 50 years making existing space inadequate. The director also reasons that the average rent of appartments in town has rised and the unaffordable rents of the houses will attract students to enroll at buckingham college.However there are certain flaws in the director’s argument.
The first flaw in the director’s argument is that he has not stated clearly what percentage of students are not the residents of the local town. The director argues that the number of students enrolling in the college would increase but can he predict what percantage of those would be from different town.there might be a case were the number of students enrolling will increase but the number of students requiring dormitories might decrease or remain constant because most of the enrolled students are localiets.
Secondly the author states that the average rent in the town has increased but he needs to make an accurate research about rents in nearby areas of the college.Whatif the rents in the nearby areas of the college are constant? also, if there is increase in average rents are they providing any extra facilities which could attract the students ? Now, the director also needs to take into consideration what will be the rents of the newly build attractive dormitories and what all facilities are they going to provide.Possibly if the rents of new dormitories are less but the basic requirements are compromised the students won’t be attracted .Other than these the director reasons that the number of students would double in 50 years which is a long time, there cannot be planning done for these long time period as you never know which factors might come into picture, he needs to plan considering next 10-15 years.
Lastly I would like to conclude that the director’s has certain flaws and he needs to perform an accurate analysis about things like number of non-residential students which may enroll,rents and the facilities in the nearby housing and prepare a plan for a comparatively shorter time period.Finally, after these is done the college would be in a state to decide about building new dormitories.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The director also reasons that the average rent of appartments in town has rised and the unaffordable rents of the houses will attract students to enroll at buckingham college.However there are certain flaws in the director's argument.
Error: appartments Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: buckingham Suggestion: bucking
Error: rised Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: unaffordable Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The director argues that the number of students enrolling in the college would increase but can he predict what percantage of those would be from different town.there might be a case were the number of students enrolling will increase but the number of students requiring dormitories might decrease or remain constant because most of the enrolled students are localiets.
Error: town.there Suggestion: town where
Error: percantage Suggestion: percentage
Error: localiets Suggestion: locality
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1923 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.918 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 48.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.505 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.731 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.336 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...e college should build new dormitories. also, since college enrollment is growing an...
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Line 1, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: However
...tudents to enroll at buckingham college.However there are certain flaws in the director...
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Line 1, column 443, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...tudents to enroll at buckingham college.However there are certain flaws in the director...
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Line 2, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in the director's argument is that he has not stated clearly what percentag...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accurate research'.
Suggestion: accurate research
...town has increased but he needs to make an accurate research about rents in nearby areas of the coll...
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Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Whatif
...ut rents in nearby areas of the college.Whatif the rents in the nearby areas of the co...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...rby areas of the college are constant? also, if there is increase in average rents ...
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Suggestion: Possibly
...ll facilities are they going to provide.Possibly if the rents of new dormitories are les...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...sed the students won't be attracted .Other than these the director reasons th...
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Other
...d the students won't be attracted .Other than these the director reasons that th...
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Line 4, column 190, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , rents
...on-residential students which may enroll,rents and the facilities in the nearby housin...
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Suggestion: Finally
...for a comparatively shorter time period.Finally, after these is done the college would ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11688311688 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95183579932 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451948051948 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.127572645 57.8364921388 256% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 218.888888889 119.503703932 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.7777777778 23.324526521 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205001080614 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104927097344 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875595753577 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143190225523 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875182060297 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.1 14.3799401198 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 48.3550499002 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 12.197005988 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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