The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Leeinho on Sun, 07/28/2019 - 05:48

The maps illustrate the current and some proposed changes of Islip town.

Overall, new spots are anticipated to replace shops and countryside at north side. Besides, some minor altercation is seen at south.

Currently, there is the main road which stretches from west to east. Also, row of shops are can be seen at north and south of the main road. Although the north of the main road is mainly countryside, a big area at the south part is covered with accommodations. Moreover, we can see that school is at the south-west of housing and park at east side which links path to both places from the main road.

Moving on to the projection of Islip town, the middle of road is expected to be removed within certain length. Instead, pathways will be created for pedestrians while bus station, shopping centre, car park, and new housing would also take over the countryside and shops respectively from west to east. Taking into consideration, shops that are affected after the creation of pedestrian road are relocated after demolishing housing in the middle. Not to mention the park will be narrowed in order to build new housing property. In fact, circular dual carriageways is formed along the new facilities connecting the current road at school and park.

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Average: 7.8 (4 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so, while, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1038.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89622641509 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67989295919 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566037735849 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 303.3 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7830931037 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3636363636 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0637438163231 0.215688989381 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331781698635 0.103423049105 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037333560617 0.0843802449381 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0526774076282 0.15604864568 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474188751697 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

The e-grader gave a wrong mark because it is looking for some key words like: small town, development... which are not available in the essay content.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 10
No. of Words: 214 200
No. of Characters: 1013 1000
No. of Different Words: 115 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.825 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.734 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 48 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.176 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4