It is indubitable that money is very important for helping others. However, I
disagree with the It is indubitable that money is very important for helping
others. However, I disagree with the given statement that it is the most
essential thing in terms of a chance to help the needy. I believe that there are
numerous ways of helping the underprivileged, and monetary aid is certainly
not the best forms of aid.
My first argument to support my viewpoint is that giving money to the poor
would be a very shortsighted approach. It would satiate their needs for some
time, but ultimately they have to be made capable of standing on their own.
Providing education and job training is better way of helping them. For
example, my friend’s mother, teaches children of the slum area every evening.
She is herself not very rich, but she is helping in better ways than money can
do.
Secondly, it is not always the financial help, which is needed by people. A
timely helping hand when a person is suffering is better than helping with money. For instance, in natural calamities, such as earthquakes and floods, the
immediate need of people is food and medical care. Many college students
volunteered to carry food and medicines to the needy, when there was a flood
in some areas of Punjab, a few years ago. Fresh medical graduates also went
and stayed there and helped people with immediate medical care. In times of
crises, such help outstrips any help that money can provide.
Opponents would argue that only the rich are in a position to help the poor, as
people need money for even the basic necessities of life such as food, clothing
and shelter. Even providing education and job training to the destitute, needs
money. They have a point, but I still believe that the help in terms of personal
effort provided by those who are, themselves, not so affluent is equally good.
To sum up, if one is rich, he is in a better situation to help others who need
money and all the things which money can provide. However, I reiterate my
view by saying that to help others, one need not be rich as help can beprovided in many better ways than with money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'It'?
Suggestion: the; It
...lping others. However, I disagree with the It is indubitable that money is very impor...
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Line 22, column 32, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...oor, as people need money for even the basic necessities of life such as food, clothing and she...
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Line 25, column 26, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...s of personal effort provided by those who are, themselves, not so affluent is equally...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 10.5418719212 237% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 5.94088669951 252% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 20.9802955665 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 31.9359605911 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1207.87684729 150% => OK
No of words: 381.0 242.827586207 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76115485564 5.00649968141 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 3.92707691288 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51912176556 2.71678728327 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 139.433497537 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477690288714 0.580463131201 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 379.143842365 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.6157635468 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.931034482759 644% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 12.6551724138 158% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.799188301 50.4703680194 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7 104.977214359 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.9669160288 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.25397266985 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.12807881773 654% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 6.9802955665 215% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292171213185 0.242375264174 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914957305179 0.0925447433944 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550318861552 0.071462118173 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768528362397 0.151781067708 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591994824145 0.0609392437508 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 12.6369458128 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 11.5310837438 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32886699507 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 55.0591133005 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 63.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 57.5 Out of 90
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