A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Anthon , a top scorer in the AP's and SAT exams was envied by all his friends . He had a very high chance of getting into the top universities across the US . But if one took time to ask if he was happy with all of this , the answer would be a big NO. He always wanted to represent his state in soccer and had an affinity for playing chess as well. But all of that was instead devoted to studying mammoth textbooks and going to classes . He is a patient of morbid obesity and has no friend circle , since he never even had time to make friends. It seems that going by this history , education system has not done justice to him.
A national curriculum ensures that all the students are going through the same educational process whihch leads leads to uniformity . If the individual states were allowed to design their own curriculum , it is very much possible that one curriculum is much harder than the other. Its also possible that the grading systems widely differ which can give unfair advantages to a particular group of students. It makes easy for universities to clearly know the strong points of the applicants which is never possible if the university is dealing with thousands of students coming from thousands of different curriculum . As previously mentioned , this may give undue advantage to the students whose curriculum are relatively easier. Curriculum designers may also want more students selecting their methodology of education , so they may intentionally deteriorate the quality of education imparted to the students. This may not be healthy for the students in the long run. They may miss out on important terms and terminologies which others know by heart.
It is no guarantee that the curriculum designers are themselves good educators who know the needs of students thoroughly . A curriculum which inhibits the confidence of a student may be created which may be disastrous for their self-confidence . In a bid to increase the number of students succesfully getting top grades in the AP , SAT exams , they may force the students to study unnecessary topics which are not only useless to most of them but also impact their learning ability and prove to be a cause of mental stress. Even if a higher percentage of the students do end up getting top scores in the national exams , it wont make the students better in any respect. Its highly possible that most of the students will get more harm than good. An unnecessarily tough curriculum can hamper the all round development of students and can qualify their ability for social interaction and their love for sports. All of the top scores may only seem good only on paper. But even then , this will set a wrong example to other curriculum designers who will then design their curriculum to be highly competitive too.
It is possible that there are certain curriculum designers who understand their students better and hence are at a better position to design meaningful curriculum for the pupils . Suppose that there is a group of students who are dyslexic and dont have adequate learning abilities . In such a case a customised curriculum will serve their needs better. Such customised curriculum should be reserved only for students who have genuine disadvantages of following the national curriculum. If same analogy were to be applied to the general student , it would create havoc. For example , assume that there is a high school well known for its students excelling in computer science olympiads. In a bid to nurture their talents , the administration decides to only teach them computer related subjects . So , the students are not being taught about the US history and neither about the english language. They are being specialised in their fields but then they are not being groomed as an all round individual . When all of their friends gain knowledge of how their country got independance and what enabled them to be a superpower , these student's hands will be paining after typing codes on the computer for hours.
This is adequate to say that all students should not follow different curriculum.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3382.0 2235.4752809 151% => OK
No of words: 688.0 442.535393258 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91569767442 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12149920406 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74101397509 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447674418605 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1058.4 704.065955056 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 6.24550561798 320% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5665259869 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4705882353 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2352941176 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.58823529412 5.21951772744 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 7.80617977528 423% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212973900282 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604493096632 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041804004143 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133150327901 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471696398805 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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