educators should teach facts only after their students have studied the ideas,trends and concepts that help explain those facts.
In our education system educators have a major role to play in shaping the interest of the students in their studies. The methods used by educators seriously influence the students mind and if there is no clarity in the educators teaching process the students start loosing interest in the related topics or subject, therefore selection of correct methods of teaching are very important.
Here the author tries to make point that facts should be teached only after students have studied ideas,trends and concepts that explain these facts, However I don’t completely agree with the authors view as students learning concepts or ideas with knowing any facts about the topic would feel disinterested in learning about the same.In an effective teaching system it is very important that the students stay motivated about learning something, they should be aware about what results these ideas or concepts lead us to.like for example many students don’t like to study trignometrics as they are unaware about its application instead if there teachers would have supported these studies with facts like how ancient people used it finding area of pyramids and how today it is has found application in design and development of certain complex structures the situation could have been better.Also we have the example of period table werein all the elements are included in one table, when students get these type of information they are exhorted in learning its trends and advantages.
Although I also believe that if facts are are not supported by ideas or concepts related to it and they are just presented as a set of information students don’t link up with it considering it vague and these sort of facts are just crammed up to succeed in academics.they don’t contribute in increment of knowledge.Here the role of the educators become very crucial and the better ones are able to make a link between facts and ideas while others just teach it for the sake of teaching.these is the reason why lot of students never like to study history as they are never made aware about its importance.they are not tought how history make us aware about our ancient culture and traditions,how our past has shaped our today and what we can learn from our past mistakes.
us;mso-fareast-language: EN-us;mso-bidi-language:AR-SA">Finally I would like to conclude that authors argument that facts should be tought only after students study ideas related to it is an over exaggeration and the more important thing for the educators is to develop a healthy relation between facts and their concepts so that the students are actuated to learn.
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 33
- Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. 50
- To serve the housing needs of our students,Buckingham college should build a number of new dormitories.Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. M 63
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems,the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 33
- Over the past two years,the number of shoppers in central plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically.Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16279069767 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39586170067 2.79657885939 121% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467441860465 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 86.0 23.0359550562 373% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 359.428101294 60.3974514979 595% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 444.0 118.986275619 373% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 86.0 23.4991977007 366% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.0 5.21951772744 287% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33991715084 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.19031259221 0.0831039109588 229% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669825326788 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206343455365 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704372267602 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 45.9 14.1392134831 325% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -15.81 48.8420337079 -32% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.8 12.1743820225 302% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.83 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.28 8.38706741573 134% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 36.4 11.2143820225 325% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 37.0 11.7820224719 314% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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